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Alone in the dark
Freezing from the cold
Crying for the love

The love I thought was real,
The love you freely gave me,
The love that you took back.

Alone in the dark
Freezing from the cold
Crying for the love

The cold that took over your soul
The cold that crept into your heart
The cold that showed in your eyes that day

Alone in the dark
Freezing from the cold
Crying for the love

The dark seperates us from those we hold dear
The dark isolates us in fear
The dark that makes us so alone
I was just trying something different a while back, and it seemed ok.
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AxeField Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2007  Professional Interface Designer
good poem. could be improved. I've read some good stuff on deviant.. needs more punch. I read about 7 of your poems, they're all good. Just need to be juice up. Imagery and impact. This is just my opinion, and is not intended to offend joo. :-D Thanks for the fav.
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incubustrav421 Featured By Owner Feb 20, 2007
it has this deep layer complexion and everything revolves around the notion of freeingly open motion and the effect of heavy weilding feelings. Great contrast in the poem, another fine job :)

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